Saturday, 14 April 2012

A Short Chapter

Well it's Saturday and that means another installment in what is becoming a not so bad story after all. I only have a short chapter for you today because, well, the chapter was short anyway. But I feel like I should do some rewrites to the next one. I figure this could do with some rewrites of it's own but that's time restraints for you.


Prologue:http://theramblingperson.blogspot.com/2012/01/untitled-space-story.html#en
Chapter one:http://theramblingperson.blogspot.com/2012/01/i-almost-broke-tradition.html#en
Chapter two:http://theramblingperson.blogspot.com/2012/01/chapter-two.html#en
Chapter three:http://theramblingperson.blogspot.com/2012/01/chapter-third.html#en
Chapter four:http://theramblingperson.blogspot.com/2012/01/fourth-wall-remains-intact.html#en
Chapter Five: http://theramblingperson.blogspot.co.uk/2012/02/five-out-of-five-for-length.html

Chapter Six: http://theramblingperson.blogspot.com/2012/04/its-been-too-long.html
Chapter Seven, well that follows this. Enjoy!

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Trent woke up a few hours later, looking at his watch to see just how late it was. When he looked at his hand he noticed something and laughed out loud. Geoff walked into the room.
“You're awake now? What's so funny?” Geoff asked him, leaning against the door frame. Trent held up his hands with a huge grin on his face. Geoff looked at them for a few seconds before he realised what had happened. His jaw dropped before he started laughing too, in disbelief though really. Trent had four fully formed fingers on each hand, complete with two thumbs as well. Somehow, amazingly, his finger had grown back and he had two complete hands.
“Did that really happen?” Geoff asked. Trent stuck his hands in his pockets and fidgeted, and he did pull out the fingertip that he cut off.
“Somehow,” Trent replied, playing with the finger “that did in fact happen.” He laughed again and pocketed the finger again. He pointed at Geoff, still laughing. “It seems like you owe me a date”.
Geoff buried his face in his palm. “Why are you keeping that thing?” he asked.
“Well that Osbourne fella might not believe us”, Trent replied. “But you're avoiding the point. When can I meet your sister?”
Geoff shook his head before replying. “No no no you aren't getting to meet her. Is there anything else? I did not expect this to happen, and it will not happen,” he said.
Trent stroked his stubble, wishing he had a beard. He gave it some thought and slapped his hands on his legs when he was done.
“The ship”, he said, “I'll call it off if you call off that I owe you money for the ship. I'm out of money and I need the money I can get for myself, so I can be off on my way”.
Geoff was a bit sad at this thought. He didn't really want Trent to go, and he did see this debt as a way to keep him around.  “Do you really have to go so soon?”, Geoff asked, before he could stop himself.
Trent put his hands behind his head and looked up at the ceiling. “I think I'll be around for a few weeks or so, I don't know how long it will take”. Geoff's face dropped. “But”, Trent continued, looking at Geoff, “You can still come with me if you want. This would still be partly your ship you know”.
Geoff looked back up, smiling again. Trent smiled back and got out of bed.
“Say, just when does your man Osbourne finish work? Can we still go see him there now?” he asked Geoff. Geoff checked the time, and saw that they could still catch Osbourne at work. So the two of them headed out and started walking towards the hospital. Trent was joking about how his date with Geoff's sister could have gone while Geoff was laughing it off and thanking Trent for saying he could still go with him if he wanted.
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PS He's not God-moding life by being able to regenerate, it's seriously restricted and several other people in fiction have had unrestricted regeneration.

34 comments:

  1. I want to be able to god-mod life...

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    1. I think it would take some of the fun away really.

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  2. Eight fingers on EACH HAND? :D

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    1. Thank you for pointing that out <3 It's been fixed, and now it's slightly longer.

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  3. Great writing Mark. You have a serious knack for this buddy.

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  4. This is coming along really well Mark. And it's fiction so there are no real restraints on how you write it. You can follow existing motifs' or invent your own. And one day people will write something and have to reference it using your name. Nicely done.

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    1. If that happened I would be pretty happy and proud, but not to sound too defeatist, but I don't see it happening. It would be beyond cool though.

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  5. I'm really enjoying these short snippets of your stories. I'm going to have to read back and find out more. ;)

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    1. Hehe have fun doing that. Just click on the "story" tag and hopefully you'll find them all.

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  6. I like the comedic effect of the biological changes as well as the jibe about the date with his sister. Keep it up, Mark!

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    1. Well I think if you woke up to discover you had regenerative powers you'd probably be a bit stunned and laugh it off.

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  7. It seems like I've missed a one or two previous chapters...

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    1. Well I did make it easy to catch up :)

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  8. And then he sewed the cut off finger to his back so he could reach itches everywhere.
    A hero was born.

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    1. I think that it's still dead. It's not a part of him anymore. Though that would have been cool. I can't really retcon it now though :(

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  9. hmm..I gotta tell my friend about this :)

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    1. Ooooh please do, I could use the exposure :)

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  10. I've read all the chapters! Some of them this afternoon and I finished the rest just now. Good fun, Mark! I really enjoy what you have going on here and look forward to what happens next. :)

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    1. Oooh thank you for doing that ^^

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  11. I like that Geoff feels sad Trent may be leaving! Quite sweet really! Take care
    x

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    1. Well he's had a pretty boring life really. This is the first major thing to really happen to him. Hey maybe I can write that into the story somehow.

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  12. I can do that with my teeth. Sometimes small chips of one of my teeth will fall out,..but then they seem to grow back. (Either that, or I just stop noticing I am missing part of my tooth. Well, whatever, it seems to work out.)

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    1. I think it's possible for teeth to repair, but as far as I know you only get two sets. Lose one of them and it won't be coming back.

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    2. I think the area can become desensitized - but actually repair?

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    3. I believe it is possible for teeth to rebuild. At least, there's a toothpaste that claims to help repair teeth. The same way that teeth can be strengthened I guess.

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  13. So, if you cut his head off what would happen....?

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    1. I'm not too sure, there have been regenerators that could come back from that. The bigger the injury though the longer he remains out of it, so if he had to regrow his head it would take him quite some time. Even if it didn't kill him, it would stop him a while.

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  14. Unrestricted regeneration is lame. See Wolverine, so over-powered :P

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    1. Actually I don't think Wolvie was that OP. He was in the movies, but he wasn't unrestricted. There was a time when he actually lost his healing factor because it burnt itself out repairing him. He had his limits. The adamantium powered him way more than his healing did I think.

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    1. I've considered it but I don't really want to give away spoilers :)

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  16. This is looking great! I like the lightheartedness of this. There's not enough of that in fiction (well, this IS coming from two humor fiction writers).

    Particularly this: Trent stroked his stubble, wishing he had a beard.

    My friend, I do this every time I think. Every time. :(

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    1. I do it all the time. Thanks for the feedback, much appreciated :)

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