Saturday, 17 March 2012

Stream Of Consciousness

I have another poem for you today, I was able to get something creative out of me this week, it's just that I decided to save it for today as Saturday seems to be when I post my poetry. In reality in this thing there are potentially three separate poems but I decided to just keep it as one long one that I call Stream Of Consciousness because that's basically what it was. I was laid in bed and I just started writing and didn't stop until my brain said "Yeah, stop now, I can't think of anything else." At first it was supposed to be about how tiny words like "yes" and "no" can have such huge impacts on our lives. Then it became out my paranoia and my own thoughts about my future, about who I am inside, and then by the end I had realised that no matter what I would never be beaten by life. I think it works as one long poem. We'll see. So enjoy!


You said no
Then I got low
How was I to know
Which way your heart would go?

You say yes
I say God bless
I expected no less
That wasn't such a mess

I ask no question at all
There is no rise or fall
I stay behind my wall
I'm afraid of that fall

Answers are what I need
But they might make me bleed
If only I could be freed
If I could plant that seed

Afraid as always
Of what no one says
Come what mays
And one of these days

Being in love with misery
Is that really me?
Is that all I can be?
I'll show you, wait and see

I may have committed near every sin
But I have the power within
To let every new day begin
To go out there and win

Heart can be so cold
Soul long sold
But still so bold
And with the wisdom of the old

It can always be my day
It can always go my way
I need to do what I say
See the light when the skies turn gray

If I try I can do it
I can do it bit by bit
I can see the light through the slit
My fire has been lit

35 comments:

  1. Awesome poem. I like the short stanzas.

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  2. oh! it made me smile the whole time..

    yeah, truly love is a misery :(

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    1. No, this is untrue. Love is beautiful, and alchemical. You decide which way you want it to go. You decide how it will work for you. No one causes us pain. Truly. Come on, people, let's all love.

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    2. I think both are true really. Love can be both of them.

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  3. it's really nice Mark..

    put it on folio! ^_^

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    1. I don't really know what that is and couldn't really find out :P

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    2. the folio?

      it's like a diary or whatever. haha..where you out everything you made, like a collection :D

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  4. Awesome stuff Mark, actually do think this is good!

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  5. awesome poem! you're great at making it.

    xoxo
    kelimutu

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  6. "My fire has been lit"
    Way to finish that one off, Mark! Good job, keep 'em coming!

    Also rhyming for four lines consecutively is hard. Props to you!

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    1. Hey last time I think I rhymed for like 10 lines straight.

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  7. As someone who has a literature degree: It's pretty good.

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    1. That's one of the nicest things I've heard someone say. Especially because my English teacher's hated my creative writing.

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  8. You truly have a talent for poetry, Mark. I can't even string two lines together, much less make them rhyme. :P

    -Barb the French Bean

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  9. i think ive heard that in a song or an adam sandler movie :D

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  10. Nice work! That's a lot of rhyming. (I get lazy with rhyming when I write poetry, and end up using words that don't really rhyme... like "toad" and "Dorito.") Also, your poem reminded me a little of Beatle's lyrics for some reason.

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    1. I think some parts of it can be like a rap really. Not sure why. But I can't rap.

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  11. That was lovely Mark and I knew you'd come back from your dry spell!! I'm going to say "I told you so" right now!!

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    1. Well I'm not that done with it yet actually. So you can't say it yet.

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  12. "I stay behind my wall, I'm afraid of that fall"...gosh, I can really relate to that. Poetry doesn't have to rhyme, but this one had depth and meaning. Loved it.
    More please!

    http://ladyofmuse.blogspot.com/

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    1. This is maybe my fourth or fifth poem actually, just look back at the last few Saturday's :)

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  13. Better than poems I write, which tend to be offensive haikus. :P

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  14. I used to be so good at poetry, but I guess that is something that needs to be exercised like anything else.

    Enjoyed reading, very creative and original!

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  15. What is any kind of poetry without emotion.... I'm guessing you understand that though. Nice...

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  16. I could never come up with a poem.

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  17. Reminds me a bit of The Little Engine That Could

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  18. I feel like there's more here. more to be channeled

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    1. Well to be fair it was 2am and I wanted sleep.

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  19. That was pretty deep. I suppose the topic relates to most of us in a way or other.

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  20. There is no good or bad with stream of consciousness, y'know? Perhaps I'm wrong, but I'm fairly certain I'm right on this one...

    Anyway, good poem~! Got my internet back so expect a coupla e-mails from me. :D

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