Saturday, 10 March 2012

Not All That Bad

Levy(athan, I'm calling you Levy now) if you read this I got a laugh out of you actually reading through the archives like that. I left some replies if you haven't seen them. If you can remember any of the posts you commented on.

I have yet another poem for you today, with a slight difference this time. This one I actually like and had fun writing. I actually wrote it on a car journey on my Blackberry and then emailed it to myself so I could copy it. Anyway, another difference is that this time, there isn't really a way to tell what it's about, and I'm not going to tell you. I want schoolchildren in a hundred years time to look over my poetry and debate on what it's actually about so I can get a good laugh in Hell. Enjoy it!

You were there when I needed you
You never let me down
You always took away
Whatever made me frown

I hold you in my hands
I take you in with my eyes
You never hurt me
Or told me any lies

You had your beauty
You had some flaws
You didn't even mind
When I broke your laws

I've needed you a lot
In this life
You kept me from pain
Even from the knife

Now as much as ever
I put my trust in you
I can always rely on you
You can make a way through

With your help
I will always get by
I hope you'll stay with me
Until the day I die

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    1. Good guess but not quite. Guess it could be applied to them too :)

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  2. Taking a wild guess here - an ode to your mind?

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    1. That's not it either, I curse my mind quite a lot sometimes actually.

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  3. This one is quite good,looks like Levy is a special person? Why hundred years, I am thinking of a bonfire right now starting to figure out your poetry.

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    1. Levy is just a person who got the crazy idea to read some of my old posts. No idea why.

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  4. wow. it's like a music to my ears..(if I read it)

    nice one again Mark!

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  5. I like this one a lot. You have a knack for poetry!!

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  6. This was a fun poem Mark! Very positive and love the flow of it! I have written poems away from my computer and sent them to me via email or phone as well... whatever it takes!!

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    1. Good to know I'm not the only one who does it :)

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  7. Other people seem to be guessing about what this is about so I figure I'll do the same. Are you describing the phone you used to write this poem?

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    1. Haha no, though it is a lovely little thing.

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  8. I know the subject of this poem, but to offer future generations the ability to have a debate....How can I ruin everything and tell everyone?

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  9. I'd say it's about music but that doesn't really apply to the second stanza.. Hmm. You did a good job keeping it ambiguous :'DD. And also, I read all your replies and they were awesome but I didn't want to spam everything up with replies to replies so yeah x'D. I'm glad you enjoyed my crazy foray, I did too.

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    1. Actually I think music does fit in with the second stanza, but it doesn't really fit with "you didn't even mind when I broke your laws." :) If I didn't want replies I wouldn't leave them in the first place :) Feel free to spam my inbox.

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  10. beautiful flaws are what its all about

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  11. What if in a hundred years, school children do indeed dig this poem out from the Internet?

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  12. beautiful you are now poem creator lol

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    1. Nah me and him aren't really on speaking terms. Dude never talks back.

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  14. That poem is pretty mushy
    My skyrocketing levels of testosterone prevent me from being able to fully comprehend it.

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  15. This is really sweet. It made me smile

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  16. I can't really say what it's about. Everytime I come up with something there is a verse that rules it out. It is an enigma wrapped in a riddle.

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  17. That's easy, it's about your new laptop.

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  18. I absolutely LOVE this! It hits a nerve for me (in a good way) and I can easily relate as I read it and know what it means for me. If you don't mind, I'd like to share this.

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    1. Hey I've never had someone share my work, I've been quoted, but that's another thing. I say go for it, just give me proper credit of course please!

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  19. Some great prose here, Mark! I relate to all lines. More of this. So, more car rides, more blackberries,and more e-mailing yourself!

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