Saturday, 25 February 2012

Just Because

So I still have no story to go here but I do have something more substantial. At about 10 o'clock last night I found myself writing poetry. I'm as amazed as you are that it turns out I can write it at decent hours. Yes I consider 10 o'clock decent. Anyway, I showed it to a friend of mine and she insisted I put it up here. So here it is. If you need me I'll be hiding from the fact that I did this. I never ever host my own poetry, and I don't totally know why. Here is my latest poem (though not my best) The Beast. I'd say enjoy but no one can enjoy this.


Walking through the forest
That is my mind
It's almost amazing
What you might find

There are lovers
Past and present
Friends are there too
Some possibly heaven-sent

There is light all around
Shining through the trees
And the smell of flowers
Flowing in the breeze

It isn't all like this
I'm afraid I must admit
There's a dark part too
More than just a bit

It grows in size
It rises and it falls
I really am lost
When the darkness calls

A terrible beast
He lives in there
It can be a terrible burden
But it's one I must bear

He rips and he tears
He destroys all I hold
If I ever feel the warmth
He makes sure I am cold

Pain and misery
Are all that he knows
Disdain and hate
All that he shows

He snarls and he growls
At whatever he can
A beast is he
No longer a man

What awakes him?
I hear you say
I think he awakens
When the skies turn gray

When even a shadow of a doubt
Creeps into my mind
He feeds upon it
and breaks the chains that bind

Whenever I feel sad or hurt
The times I feel pain
I fade to grey
The beast once again

The worst is yet to come
For you see
That terrbile creature, that beast
He is me

43 comments:

  1. Come out from behind that tree!! I see you hiding over there Mark. This is very good you know. You've conveyed the concrete here by using the abstract and I know what you're feeling. It's harder to post poetry than prose for me because it's so much closer to who I am inside and makes me more vulnerable to criticism.

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    1. Thank you very much. That probably is the reason I don't like to do it. What matters more is that I like it but if someone doesn't like it, it's going to get to me. It shouldn't but it does.

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    2. It gets to me too. If I get 10 positive comments and one negative comment on a poem, I'll focus on the one negative and feel horrible. It just cuts so close to the bone with poetry.

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  2. I think it is wonderful. You should definitely put your poetry here

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  3. Wow this was really good! As a newbie (very very newbie) I was glad I cam across your blog. I am a bit worried about posting my writing in case people hate it. Then my heart will be broken. Haha. But well done for taking the plunge and just doing it. It really was a good poem.

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    1. I don't have a heart to break, it was broken so long ago. Though I still feel pain of course.

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  4. That was really nice. I really liked it. :)

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  5. I read it while listening to Crosses, fronted by Chino Moreno. It fit.

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  6. Somewhere along the way, it got dark and twisty. I like the way it ended :)

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  7. I liked it. Glad you decided to share it. :)

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  8. Mark! that was awesome! you should write more often..

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  9. Now that is deep. You should so post your poetry to poetry submission sites like your-poetry.com or something, they are great for exposure.

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    1. I may do it. There was another site I was going to try but it didn't want to work.

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  10. Might want to correct "skys" to "skies". ;D

    I couldn't help myself but to read that as rap lyrics. Sorry.
    But near the end I was all like "yeah he's pointing at himself there". Last line: "BINGO"
    Anyhoo, that was pretty good. Bit depressing, sure, but really good nonetheless!

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    1. Well thank you for correcting me, you know I like it really. I was depressed when I wrote it, and I'm even more depressed now, so that should explain that.

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  11. This is a great introspective piece! Your soul laid out on this page inspires me, Mark.

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    1. Well thank you, I wasn't expecting that.

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  12. 10PM is perfectly decent. I'll be honest, I consider anything before 1AM to be a decent hour.

    And it's not bad, I'll be honest, I have a thing for writing more/better when it's late.

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    1. I'm at my most creative at like 1AM.

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  13. I usually get the most writing done late at night, I think its because my thoughts are pretty free flowing the later it gets.

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    1. Same here. I spend so long trying not to think that when I'm tired it all just hits me and everything becomes a lot clearer.

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  14. I always write when inspiration hits, no matter how late or sober I am :P

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  15. Very good! I actually do my best writing at night, that is why I sleep in late!

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  16. Now i feel like walking through a forest; it is a shame I live in the desert. :/

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  17. I really like it! Thank you for posting.

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  18. I think sometimes it is easier to express personal feelings through things like poetry, and art, because it is sort of a mask to hide behind...and you can be alll crafty like.

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  19. Very good poem love endings like that where in the end it was talking about the writer himself

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  20. I first thought the beast was your depression. I was kinda right lol.

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    1. Well it's my anger as well and various other defects, such as my inability to let people get close.

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  21. A peculiar piece...but depression can skew yet define a poet's work.

    Hmm hmm hmm, pretty good nonetheless~!

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  22. Mark...that was by far outstanding. I loved it. You do have a knack for poetry. Sometimes it just so happens the topic is within ourselves. Perhaps writing more like this can help contain the beast?

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    1. I only ever really write about myself but nothing can contain that part of me. Getting my emotions out with writing might put it to sleep, but it's still always there.

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  23. That was fantastic. I do most of my writing at night. I hope it's my best. This poetry? Really really well done.

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  24. Good job. I used to write poetry as well.

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  25. You're too modest, I really like that.

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    1. Thank you, though some people find it annoying.

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  26. I don't like short verse. But That's personal preference. It's amazing how therapeutic poetry can be at points. I'm not sure I could ever be brave enough to post my various poetries for the world to see.

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    1. I don't really have that much confidence either, I did it just because someone told me to. So post your poetry for me!

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  27. See! You ARE really good at this stuff :').

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    1. Now now, let's not say things we can't take back :P

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